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Emi Young :iconthebluepenguin8:TheBluePenguin8 3 0 Heart it Breaks :iconthebluepenguin8:TheBluePenguin8 3 0 Belle Aire Motel By Magaliciousart - Edited :iconthebluepenguin8:TheBluePenguin8 2 2 Sunset :iconthebluepenguin8:TheBluePenguin8 0 0 Shelby :iconthebluepenguin8:TheBluePenguin8 1 0 Apocalyptic Questions :iconthebluepenguin8:TheBluePenguin8 2 0 Artist Eye :iconthebluepenguin8:TheBluePenguin8 1 0 Friend of a Friend :iconthebluepenguin8:TheBluePenguin8 1 0 Splatter :iconthebluepenguin8:TheBluePenguin8 3 0 Ellen Kathleen :iconthebluepenguin8:TheBluePenguin8 2 0 Lost Child :iconthebluepenguin8:TheBluePenguin8 2 0 Vinyl Record Freedom :iconthebluepenguin8:TheBluePenguin8 3 0 Kayla :iconthebluepenguin8:TheBluePenguin8 1 0 Earth :iconthebluepenguin8:TheBluePenguin8 3 0 Rose Nebula :iconthebluepenguin8:TheBluePenguin8 6 1

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Tikki Mikk - Fanart D.Gray Man :iconcristinaesteve:CristinaEsteve 70 9 i made a guy :iconjaidenanimations:JaidenAnimations 1,957 386 [+Video] Commission - Ophelia :iconhyanna-natsu:Hyanna-Natsu 2,727 160 Good morning Abu Dhabi :iconalhabshi:AlHabshi 540 25 Daydreaming :iconsarahbeeillustration:sarahbeeillustration 40 2 A Slave to Beauty :iconstarkite1:StarKite1 22 0 Druid - Cill Dara :iconsamblackbirdart:samblackbirdart 22 1 Cill Dara - Torch in Darkness :iconsamblackbirdart:samblackbirdart 9 1 Darkness :iconandreavelazquez:andreavelazquez 66 8 Random Doodle #7 - not that random :iconoyozz:oyozZ 21 8 The Sonorous Secret :iconluxdani:LuxDani 149 4 Saturn :iconmoonlightart13:MoonlightArt13 41 2 Prompt and Noct :iconzakurarain:ZakuraRain 76 5 Visitor :iconkinixuki:kinixuki 103 14 The shadows of sector 22 :icondamaimikaz:DamaiMikaz 1,041 146 055 - Space :iconscarlett-aimpyh:Scarlett-Aimpyh 1,370 137

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Alright so this is pretty basic in texture, I really like the hair texture but you have to zoom in to be able to see it. The shading is...


First off, unless it is your style, I suggest using capital letters for words you may want to emphasise, or for the first word of each ...


I love this photo! The implied lines take me across the entire photo. The color is a subtle yet strong contrast. The green is visible y...


First, Id like to point out I love the implied lines of this picture (if you don't know what that means, look it up. It will be very us...

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TheBluePenguin8
Zachary/Zoey
Artist | Hobbyist | Traditional Art
United States
I like to draw. Please critique my work so that I may improve.
I did not get this far into drawing skills, by being told my art is perfect.

"The only thing that can be achieved in life without effort, is failure."
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Alright so this is pretty basic in texture, I really like the hair texture but you have to zoom in to be able to see it. The shading is simplified but I think that's fine for the style you have. However you could have added some grooves in the dress and still kept it simple. (Add more texture in the dress, it looks to flat) You can also make the dress more wavy at the bottom.

The shading on the legs is a little too subtle, I suggest making them just a tad darker.

This might just be me, but I think her hair line should be a tad lower.

The shoulders (especially the one on the right) are a too narrow/small, they need to be a little more outward. Her foot on the right is also too square. If you could round it a little it would look dramatically better. Aside from that anatomy looks great.

In conclusion you have done all around a very good job, but you can change a lot of very minor things that would make it look fantastic. I would love to see a reupload of this. Keep it up!
First off, unless it is your style, I suggest using capital letters for words you may want to emphasise, or for the first word of each line. Or capitalize only one word. For example "Mercy".
When a word is capitalized it gives it more power, you must use that to your advantage. Mercy seems to be the theme of your poem, and yet you have "prompted nightmare" for the title. I think it's a little irrelevant and should be changed. the best poetry are ones of ambiguity, your seems to just be plane to you, and hard to understand by others.
This is just me, but I belive your opinion on mercy is wrong. Mercy is defined as "compassion or forgiveness shown toward someone whom it is within one's power to punish or harm." Because of this, when you say "mercy is not always kind" I find it frustrating. Because mercy is never deserved. Because forgiveness is also never deserved, it can't be bought or earned. Its only given by one's heart from care. (But that last bit is my opinion)

In conclusion, use capitalization, be careful on your choice of words and applying those words (such as mercy and saying it is not always kind), and try to use language that can be interpreted in more then one way for your audience. (ambiguity).

I hope this helps. Good luck in your poetry writing.
I love this photo! The implied lines take me across the entire photo. The color is a subtle yet strong contrast. The green is visible yet it doesn't pull away from the trucks, the photo quality is fantastic and it makes me think "What happened to these trucks?" photos that make the viewer ask questions are the best pictures. there is however one thing I do not like. and that is the title. "Show Me Mercy", perhaps it is because I do not understand the photo or see it as you do, but I would strongly reconsider the title to be more relevant with the photo. Keep up the good work!
First, Id like to point out I love the implied lines of this picture (if you don't know what that means, look it up. It will be very useful to know and be able to apply). The road, grass, and the clouds lines really guide my eyes around the picture. However this may just be me, but it seems to tall of a photograph. I do like that the change in color (from blue to a light purple) is noticeable from the bottom of the sky to the top of the photo, however it just is so much too look at from top to bottom. Its really hard to get the full impact at once. If I were you, I would consider cropping the top substantially. The brightness of the road is fantastic and clearly stands out. If possible it would be great to be able to counter it with a color like green or a stronger intensity of blue.

good job! Keep up the work.
Raining indoors
    Atmosphere could be either be depressing or uplifting based on lighting and building environment
        Could include a person showing sadness or enjoyment based on the mood.
Clouds indoors
    Atmosphere would have an air of fantasy and wonder to it. Bright environment.
        could be a person representing a happy mindset contrasting with someone who is upset that has dark clouds near them.

Galaxy/space environment in everyday things
bland world with galaxy hair
tea/coffee galaxy from the steam
literal mind being blowing and galaxy is the platter. same concept except with music and headphone music.

Inverse reality
examples- fire is water.
    raining fire, fire extinguisher is fire starter, drinking fire, fish swimming in fire (So on so forth)
        further concept - clouds of fire and sea of fire (Beautiful, not scary)

fantasy worlds
    Basic geometric shapes in 3D form (maybe some 2D shapes) in front of a dark colorful background (like space). Some 3D shapes will have natural worldly things on them such as a TV, radio, a person reading (so on so forth).
         Each world would have its own mood and colorful enviroment.

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Hello!
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