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So if you remember I've critiqued you not too long ago. I'm glad to say you've taken my advice and made some strong improvements! The h...


Alright so this is pretty basic in texture, I really like the hair texture but you have to zoom in to be able to see it. The shading is...


First off, unless it is your style, I suggest using capital letters for words you may want to emphasise, or for the first word of each ...


I love this photo! The implied lines take me across the entire photo. The color is a subtle yet strong contrast. The green is visible y...

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Zachary/Zoey
Artist | Hobbyist | Traditional Art
United States
I like to draw. Please critique my work so that I may improve.
I did not get this far into drawing skills, by being told my art is perfect.

"The only thing that can be achieved in life without effort, is failure."
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So if you remember I've critiqued you not too long ago. I'm glad to say you've taken my advice and made some strong improvements! The hair texture is much more bold and noticeable. Because you have a stronger change from light to dark it gives the hair a lot more form. The dress also has some nice contrast with light and dark. however, I encourage you to increase the dark and light even more. your shading is still a little too subtle on the legs. (also, you can draw hands, so why not draw some simple toes? It would make her feel more real). Also the right shoulder is a little lower then the left shoulder. But in general body proportions have improved from when I last saw.

In conclusion. you are improving, keep up the good work. But make sure to increase the color shifts from light to dark to add more form. It would really make your work stand out.
Alright so this is pretty basic in texture, I really like the hair texture but you have to zoom in to be able to see it. The shading is simplified but I think that's fine for the style you have. However you could have added some grooves in the dress and still kept it simple. (Add more texture in the dress, it looks to flat) You can also make the dress more wavy at the bottom.

The shading on the legs is a little too subtle, I suggest making them just a tad darker.

This might just be me, but I think her hair line should be a tad lower.

The shoulders (especially the one on the right) are a too narrow/small, they need to be a little more outward. Her foot on the right is also too square. If you could round it a little it would look dramatically better. Aside from that anatomy looks great.

In conclusion you have done all around a very good job, but you can change a lot of very minor things that would make it look fantastic. I would love to see a reupload of this. Keep it up!
First off, unless it is your style, I suggest using capital letters for words you may want to emphasise, or for the first word of each line. Or capitalize only one word. For example "Mercy".
When a word is capitalized it gives it more power, you must use that to your advantage. Mercy seems to be the theme of your poem, and yet you have "prompted nightmare" for the title. I think it's a little irrelevant and should be changed. the best poetry are ones of ambiguity, your seems to just be plane to you, and hard to understand by others.
This is just me, but I belive your opinion on mercy is wrong. Mercy is defined as "compassion or forgiveness shown toward someone whom it is within one's power to punish or harm." Because of this, when you say "mercy is not always kind" I find it frustrating. Because mercy is never deserved. Because forgiveness is also never deserved, it can't be bought or earned. Its only given by one's heart from care. (But that last bit is my opinion)

In conclusion, use capitalization, be careful on your choice of words and applying those words (such as mercy and saying it is not always kind), and try to use language that can be interpreted in more then one way for your audience. (ambiguity).

I hope this helps. Good luck in your poetry writing.
I love this photo! The implied lines take me across the entire photo. The color is a subtle yet strong contrast. The green is visible yet it doesn't pull away from the trucks, the photo quality is fantastic and it makes me think "What happened to these trucks?" photos that make the viewer ask questions are the best pictures. there is however one thing I do not like. and that is the title. "Show Me Mercy", perhaps it is because I do not understand the photo or see it as you do, but I would strongly reconsider the title to be more relevant with the photo. Keep up the good work!
Raining indoors
    Atmosphere could be either be depressing or uplifting based on lighting and building environment
        Could include a person showing sadness or enjoyment based on the mood.
Clouds indoors
    Atmosphere would have an air of fantasy and wonder to it. Bright environment.
        could be a person representing a happy mindset contrasting with someone who is upset that has dark clouds near them.

Galaxy/space environment in everyday things
bland world with galaxy hair
tea/coffee galaxy from the steam
literal mind being blowing and galaxy is the platter. same concept except with music and headphone music.

Inverse reality
examples- fire is water.
    raining fire, fire extinguisher is fire starter, drinking fire, fish swimming in fire (So on so forth)
        further concept - clouds of fire and sea of fire (Beautiful, not scary)

fantasy worlds
    Basic geometric shapes in 3D form (maybe some 2D shapes) in front of a dark colorful background (like space). Some 3D shapes will have natural worldly things on them such as a TV, radio, a person reading (so on so forth).
         Each world would have its own mood and colorful enviroment.

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Thanks a lot for the fav!^^
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Thanks for the favourite I do appreciate it!
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Thank you for the favorite! (:
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Clu-art Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thank you for faving ! :D

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CrisEsHer Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2017  Student Traditional Artist
Oh sweetie thanks for the watch! I'm glaad Hug Heart 
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Hello!
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